The Pitch:
G.R.E.E.N.
(Green Research in Ecologically Enhancing Networks)
My idea is to create a company in which produces green products that can combine your everyday necessities with green concepts hence the name G.R.E.E.N. meaning Green Research in Ecologically Enhancing Networks. We would use environmentally friendly resources that are both cheap and easily recyclable or biodegradable such as Aluminum for metal and biodegradable polymers for filters, packaging, you name it. For our first concept we would like to introduce the Potter Spotter (name in pending) which will make use of your phone and any type of plant you may have. The phone would be placed on an adjustable platform that would connect to an aluminum container with enclosed water and the plant placed right under it. Now instead of forgetting where you place your phone and having no place to put your phone when your studying or going to sleep you can place it on the Potter Spotter (name in pending). When your phone vibrates for whatever alarms you set, the vibrations will navigate though the aluminum bars and shake the canister full of water which will cause the water inside to drip through the biodegradable filter and water your plant. This is just a beginning design an will surely improve as will others green concepts.
A reflection on the feedback you received from last pitch:
I have no feedback from my last pitch but what I can tell you is that I was influenced by the feedback other pitches have gotten. I should speak slow and clearly while giving coherent pitch on my company and product/products while also being somewhat presentable. Also, having something to show for my work instead of just talking about what I'm doing helps immensely for the viewer. (Approved by Dr. Pryor)
A reflection that I could do that I know people would talk about would be my speech and my eye contact. I had a whole pitch laid out because I'm terrible with coming up words on the spot and I talk way too fast. In this video I tried to talk slower than I usually do but I could definitely improve upon it as well as making more eye contact with the camera as it would how that I am more confident and ready to present my Elevator Pitch.
What did you change, based on the feedback?
At the moment nothing has changed since this is my first Elevator Pitch but since I accessed the feedback from other pitches I have developed my pitch better than what it would have looked at additionally.
Your elevator pitch was really good Joseph. Not only did you make eye contact, use positive body language, and speak clearly, you also had a visual design to portray to your audience. Really nice job! Check out mine here- http://mudine.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
ReplyDeleteHello Joseph,
ReplyDeleteGreat idea for a product. Your G.r.e.e.n concept is really cool. I am curious about how your water source suspended in the air will not leak or spill, over watering your plants and making a mess? You said something about a filter, but I can't help but think any malefactions and your phone or other digital devices could get destroyed. I wouldn't sacrifice an $800 phone for a $2 plant. Your design will need to be fool proof. You should probably do a little research about succulents and air plants, both would be great plants if you were to design a prototype because they require less water and light than flowering options. I do like this concept however, I could see a window garden in my kitchen window (plenty of sun there). If my phone was away from danger and possible being charged, it could play music as I prepare dinner and the vibrations of the activity would be watering my herbs. Great idea!
You are a little choppy when you speak and going faster then you think. I do the same thing when I'm nervous. Practice your pace and delivery once or twice before shooting. Imagine you have your prototype and are pitching to investors. The more confident you sound the easier it is to sell. No one knows more about this product then you. It is your creation. Use this fact to build your confidence. Great job, I hope to see this product in the future.
here is a link to my ideahttp://dcbostwick.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-2.html
Dear Joseph,
ReplyDeleteThe idea is socially responsible, which is the essence of my concept (check my elevator pitch out at http://taleemreflections.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html) so I am all for it. This is your first pitch so writing it down is a great idea. I think you should simplify the writing using shorter sentences and incorporate statistics or other clear benefits of your idea. Showing the idea visually is great but if you can make it more colorful and easier to see, it would make the point come across so much better. I also talk fast so I know exactly where you are coming from. Just take the time to practice and hopefully memorize your pitch. This will not only help you slow down but also make the delivery very smooth. Lastly, don't forget that the camera is your friend so smile, smile again, and keep smiling. Thanks.
Farrukh